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FADE IN: Meeting the Hero: Tripp on a date.
Inciting Incident: still living at home.
Meeting Mother and Father Mentor: Mom and Pop in bed.
Ordinary World: Tripp getting dressed; Mom makes the house, cooks breakfast.
Meeting Shape Shifter and Ally: Ace and Demo in yoga class.
Call to Adventure: you're afraid of love.
Refusal: it's gonna take a stick of dynamite to get me out of my parents house.
Pushed to the Journey: the neighbours son has moved out; Tripp hasn't met the right girl.
Introducing the Romantic Challenge: Paula walks into the cafe and lays on the recliner.
Meeting the Romantic Challenge: Tripp goes over to talk to Paula.
Conscious Decision to the First Threshold: I'll meet you here on Monday.
Romantic Challenge's Ordinary World: Paula walks into her apartment.
Romantic Challenge's Ally: Kit
Romantic Challenge's Ally's Challenge: that bird!
Time Pressure: Paula meets Mom and Pop; she'll get him out by 15 th Sept.
Rules: Paula tells how she'll do it.
Developing Characters and Relationships: Tripp with Ace, Demo and Geoffrey in his room.
Pushed to the First Threshold: Mom won't do the housework anymore.
Outer Cave: lunch on the boat (almost).
Elixir: I'd like to own a boat like this but it's not the right time in my life.
Trial: Paula pretends she's a buyer.
Middle Cave / Meeting Allies: mountain biking with the boys.
Challenge Reminder: bitten by the squirrel; imbalance with nature.
Inner Cave: Tripp arrives at Paula's apartment.
Ally's Challenge: Kit and the bird problem.
Belly of the Whale: dinner; flicking the food.
World of Trials and Transformation:
Paula plays hard to get/ Kit's bird problem.
Outer Cave: Hero in his Professional World: Tripp trying to sell a yacht.
Middle Cave: Paula persuades Tripp to come to the Vet.
Inner Cave: Paula and the Vet discuss the deception.
2: the paint balling sequence:
Outer Cave: Ace sees Kit.
Middle Cave: Ace tries to talk to Kit.
Inner Cave: Paula wins at Paintball.
Transformation: Paula gets the nod.
Outer Cave: Paula lets Tripp teach her to sail.
Middle Cave: Push to the Elixir: Paula tells Tripp he should buy that boat.
Inner Cave: Kit smells fun; Paula had fun.
Resistance / Return to the Ordinary World: Tripp decides to dump Paula on the surfboard.
Resisting the Return to the Ordinary World: the Dolphin bites Tripp; imbalance with nature.
Outer Cave: Tripp introduces Paula to his parents.
Middle Cave: Mom tells her he's breaking up with her.
Inner Cave: Paula refuses to be dumped; Paula stays the night.
Transformation: Mom catches Paula sneaking out.
Kit's Challenge: she wants the shotgun.
Developing Characters and Relationships: Paula thinks she's still in control / Tripp tried to break up with her (talking in the bike shop).
Meeting with the Oracle: Paula with another client; Ace spots her; he wants something.
Resisting the Sword: Kit wants the minimum wage slacker.
Journey to the Sword: the date at the Oceanarium; the begin to get on.
Guardians of the Sword: Kit and Ace shoot the bird; they CPR the bird.
Seizing the Sword: they kiss and fall; assumed sex.
Shape Shifter revealed: Demo wants to talk to Paula about the dating my best friend for money thing.
Near Death Experience: Paula has to break up with Tripp because Geoffrey's mother was going to marry Tripp; an ethical problem.
Atonement: Demo tells Tripp that Paula was hired by Mom and Pop to get him out of the house.
Apotheosis: Tripp cooks and confronts everyone at dinner.
Ultimate Boon: Tripp decides to move out.
Refusal: get the fuck out of the car.
Disgust with the Self: Tripp alone; Tripp talking to Geoffrey.
Pushed to the return: Paula returns the money; Mom realizes Paula's in love with Tripp.
Resisting the Return: Tripp won't get in the car.
Pushed to the Return: you should see Paula.
Challenge Reminder : Imbalance: mountain climbing; getting bitten; falling.
Magic Flight: Paula is moving to Colorado.
Kits Challenge Resolved: she's persuaded someone to sleep with her more than once.
Forced to Face the Challenge: Nature rejects Tripp.
Allies Challenges Resolved: Demo is a traveler and Ace has bought his own home.
Pop's Challenge resolved: Pop in the naked room.
Mom's Challenge Resolved: Mom tells Tripp what she's afraid of.
Rescue from Without: Mom calls a meeting.
Deception / Forced to Return: Kit tells Paula what she thinks of her; lets get the sweater.
Crossing the Return Threshold: Kit takes Paula to meet Tripp.
Catharsis 1: Demo gets the girl in the coffee shop.
Catharsis 2: Paula tells Tripp she was going to break up with him.
Catharsis 3: Ace puts it all on the big screen.
Developing Characters and Relationships: the people watching.
Master of Two Worlds: Tripp and Paula make up; everyone kisses.
Freedom to Live: Mom and Pop alone in the house.
Freedom to Live: Tripp and Paula on the yacht.Hero's Challenge Resolved: the dolphin doesn't bite.
by Kal Bashir