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FADE IN: Context: Road; Middle America;
Meeting the Mentor in her Ordinary World: Louise in the cafe.
Symbol of the Transformation: smoking lessens your sex drive.
Transformed Mentor / Romantic Challenge: Louise smokes like a pro.
Meeting the Hero: Thelma in her Ordinary World: Thelma at home cooking.
Hero's Inner Challenge: I have to ask Daryl for permission.
Meeting the Interdictor: Darryl.
Developing the Interdictor: Darryl in regional manager; having an affair; asshole.
Foreshadow of the Journey: hey Thelma, when are you going to run away with me? She's running away with me.
Breaking the Interdiction: what time are you picking me up.
Time Pressure: 2 o'clock.
Hero seeks guidance from the Mentor: what kind of stuff shall I bring?
Mentor's Magic Carpet: Louise gets into her car.
Preparing fro the Journey: Thelma and Louise packing.
Developing Characters: the way both Thelma and Louise pack.
Mentor's Romantic Challenge: Jimmy's not home.
Mentor's Guidance: Thelma wants to bring the lantern etc; you don't need to bring al that.
Loop: Pre Transformation State: the joint photo.
Magic Gift / Foreshadow of the Physical Separation: the gun.
Developing the Interdiction and Interdictor: he's gonna kill you.
Leaving the Old World: in the car, leaving town.
Fish out of Water: New Self: Thelma smoking clumsily.
Threshold Marker: stopping at the intersection.
Hero pushing to the First Threshold: can't we stop for a minute.
Mentor resisting the First Threshold: no, it'll be dark soon.
Mentor pushed to the First Threshold: OK, but it's gonna be a quick stop.
Border of the First Threshold: driving to the bar.
New Creatures in the New World: people in the bar.
Mentor's Road Travelled: It's been years since I was in a place like this.
Threshold Guardian: the waitress.
Pushing to the Outer Cave: Thelma ordering some wild drinks; I've had it up to here with sedate.
Mentor Accompanies Hero: I've changed my mind, I'll have a Margarita etc.
Pushed to the Middle Cave: Harlan hits on Thelma.
Resisting the Middle Cave: Louise tells Harlan to take a hike.
Pushing to the Middle Cave: Thelma insists on having a good time.
Remembering the Old World: Thelma references Darryl and Thelma references Jimmy.
Pushed to the Middle Cave: more drinks arrive.
Pushing to the Middle Cave: lets have some fun.
Middle Cave: Thelma dances with Harlan; gets intimate and drunk with Harlan.
Resisting the Inner Cave: Louise sits down; I'm going to the girls room and then we're out of here.
Pushed to the Inner Cave: Harlan takes Thelma outside for some fresh air.
Inner Cave: Harlan tries to rape Thelma.
Resisting the [Death] Trial: Louise pulls a gun; walks away.
Pushed to the [Death] Trial: Harlan calls Louise a bitch.
[Death] Trial: Louise shoots Harlan.
Foreboding: oh my God.
Transformation Proceeds: Thelma takes the driving seat.
Forced out of the First Threshold: Thelma and Louise rush from the scene of the crime.
Obstacle to the Escape: the truck; fucking asshole.
No Way Back: who's going to believe us if we go to the police.
Foreboding: Louise sick; Thelma crying.
Border of the World of the Transformation: arriving at the café.
Resisting the Transformation / Developing Characters and Relationships / Conflict: so this is all my fault is it?
Wishing For / Pulled Back to the Old World: Thelma rings home; Darryl out.
Meeting the Antagonism: Hal inspects Harlan's body and questions the waitress.
Antagonism dissuaded from the Journey: neither of those two was the murdering type Hal.
Mentor's Romantic Challenge: Jimmy still not in.
Physical Change: Louise notices a mark on her face.
Pushing to the Transformation: come on, Louise, where are we going?
On the Road to / Pulled to the World of the Transformation: driving on the freeway.
Fish out of Water: Thelma loses some money; shit, $41.
Resisting the World of the Transformation: arguing in the hotel room.
Pushing toward the Trials: Louise calls Jimmy and asks him to wire $6700.
Forced to the World of the Transformation: Thelma! Get in the car!
Developing the Antagonism: an APB on Thelma and Louise; letting the Bureau in on this.
Transformation Progressing: Thelma realises that she should be mad at Darryl.
Foreshadow of the Conscious Decision: Louise is going to Mexico; are you with me Thelma?
Learning of Trial 1: Jimmy tells Louise where to go to collect the money.
Transformation Progressing: Thelma buys some drinks.
Creatures of the World of the Transformation: what are you looking at?
Pushed back to the Old World: Louise tells Thelma to call home.
Refusing the Old World: Thelma tells Darryl to fuck himself.
Meeting the Shape Shifter: Thelma bumps into JD.
Resisting the Shape Shifter: Louise doesn't want JD to come along.
Conscious Decision: How long before we're in Mexico?
Developing the Antagonism: Hal doing a search in his office.
Shape Shifter's Necessity: did you see his butt?
Resisting the Shape Shifter: Louise is not in the mood for company.
World of the Transformation: I need you to find all the secondary roads to Mexico.
Mentor's Backstory: I don't want to have to go through Texas.
Developing the Antagonism: Hal searches in Louise's apartment.
Marker of the Road of Trials: crossing the train track.
Celebrating the Crossing into the Road of Trials: Thelma and Louise singing in the car.
Developing the Antagonism: Hal arrives at Louise's work – the café.
Shape Shifter joins the Journey: Thelma begs.
Developing Characters and Relationships: Hal questions Darryl.
Hero's Romantic Challenge: Thelma talks to JD in the car; she has not slept with anyone but Darryl.
Foreshadow of the Resolution: Louise avoids the cops; JD realises that the girls are avoiding the police.
Developing the Antagonism: Hal phones in to his boss; relates what they've known so far.
Resisting Trial 1: you two better say your goodbyes.
Pushed toward the Trial: Jimmy turns up at the hotel in Oklahoma.
Resisting Trial 1: Jimmy forces JD to leave.
Pushed toward the Trial: the girls get a room
Trial 1: [the hotel sequence]
Louise counts the money and gives it to Thelma.
Thelma talks about her relationship with Jimmy:
Louise tells Thelma to guard the money.
Thelma won't tell Jimmy what's going on.
Jimmy gives Louise a ring.
JD knocks on Thelma's door.
Transforming: Louise tells Jimmy to let go.
JD gets tactile.
JD relates how he robs liquor stores and kisses her.
Louise asks Jimmy if he remembers how they met.
Transforming: Thelma sleeps with JD.
Transformed: Louise didn't sleep with Jimmy (she let go).
Transformed: Jimmy says all the right stuff at breakfast.
Louise keeps the ring.
Goodbye to the Old Self: Louise gives Jimmy a kiss goodbye.
Waitress: it's a good thing he left when he did, we thought we were going to have to put out a fire.
Transformed: Thelma walks into the café; you look different…
Oh my God Thelma, where's the money.
JD has taken the money.
Pushed to Trial 2: Louise cries.
Transformed: Thelma tells Louise not to worry about it; takes charge.
Developing the Antagonism: Darryl is going to help entrap Thelma.
Trial 2: [robbing the store]:
Stopping outside the liquor store.
Creatures in the World of Trial 2: the old lady looking out of the window.
Thelma robs the liquor store.
Escaping the World of Trial 2: driving away.
Developing the Antagonism: Hal watches the footage of the robbery.
Resisting Trial 3: hey Louise, slow down a little bit.
Foreshadow of the Atonement: the truck driver gets dirty.
Developing the Antagonism: the police catch Jimmy returning.
Washing off the Old Self: Louise washes herself.
Creatures of this World: The old man.
Losing the Old Self: Louise gives the old man her jewellery.
Resisting going back to the Old World: Louise tells Thelma they won't believe what they say.
Mentor's Backstory: how do you know about this stuff anyway?
Transformed: where did you get this? I stole it.
Threshold Marker: the biker passing; the road.
Shape Shifter Revealed: JD pulled in and interrogated by Hal.
Developing Characters and Relationships / Conflict between Old and New Mentors: JD provokes Darryl.
Trial 3: Thelma calls home; they're tapping the phone; Louise speaks to Hal.
Forced to Transform: Hal knows they're going to Mexico; JD told them; you gotta stop being so open, Thelma.
Developing the Antagonism: Hal et al watching Darryl's TV.
Developing Characters and Relationships: Thelma always wanted to travel; in the car.
Rest Break: just driving in the car.
Rest Break: appreciating the silence and the crickets.
Foreshadow of the Atonement: they meet the truck driver again.
Comedic Catharsis: Thelma thinking of Harlan's face.
Mentor's Backstory: Thelma realises that Louise was raped in Texas.
Meeting the Oracle: State Police officer pulls the girls over.
Seizing the Sword: Thelma pulls a gun on the officer; take the belt and the glasses.
Transformed: Thelma tells Louise to blow up the radio; no the police radio!
Transformed: Thelma takes the driving seat.
Developing the Antagonism: Hal says that their luck will run out.
Reward: Thelma happy that they made the decision they made; having more fun; not sorry.
Near Death Experience:
They're going to have to charge them with murder; Hal et al have got their location.
Hal wants to make sure they don't get shot; he knows what happened to Louise in Texas.
Louise tells Thelma she's not making any deals; Jimmy's not an option; Thelma can't go back.
They've got to figure out if they want to come in dead or alive.
New World: it's green out there now.
I feel awake; I don't remember feeling this awake; we could change our names; change our jobs.
Atonement with the Father:
They meet the truck driver; you girls about ready to get serious.
I think so; follow us; going off road.
The truck driver doesn't apologise; Thelma and Louise blow up the truck.
The mountain bike rider finds the state police officer.
Hal et al find the truck; Thelma and Louise now classified armed and dangerous; serious threat.
Pushed toward the Resolution: They have to get off the freeway.
Magic Flight: The police pursue.
Ultimate Boon: they lose some of the cops.
Refusal: I know this whole thing was my fault.
Foreboding: silent and dark towards the unknown.
Completely Transformed: Thelma lights a cigarette like an expert.
Foreshadow of the Master of Two Worlds: you're a great friend.
Rescue from Without: the Grand Canyon brings them to a dead halt.
Hal's 'copter confronts them.
The State Police block their way back.
Final Antagonism: the police arm themselves.
Master of the Two Worlds:
Hal begs Max et al to restrain themselves.
Max restrains Hal
Freedom to Live: lets not get caught; lets just keep going.
Hal runs after them.
Loop: when they took the photo of themselves.
by Kal Bashir